Mark Dispenza, current member of The Bootcamp's script, DOPPLEGANGER, just won Best Script at the Web Series Festival Global. Well deserved.
Congrats to Stephen Hoover, a Bootcamp alum, for officially becoming a member of the WGA. Credited on the film TINKER which is on Netflix, and also the screenwriter on the film FUNK YOU, which is in development/pre-production out in Hollywood.
There are probably hundreds of signs that the writer of that script I'm screaming at is an amateur. But today, I'd like to give a mere 50. Most of these may seem like common sense, yet you'd be amazed at the sheer number of projects plagued with these issues. Some of them may make you worry about your own work. But hey, at least you'll know for next time and you'll be one step closer to making sure your work is at the highest of professional standards.
The following is in NO particular order and covers a broad range of script issues.
From: Louisiana Entertainment Report
Soylent Green Is People
When Charlton Heston uttered these words in the classic 1973 science fiction film, Soylent Green, he was referring to the discovery that to survive the over population of a future Earth, its inhabitants were eating a product that was literally made from human beings. So the plot of this story, the big reveal, was that humans were eating humans to survive.
People eating people.
What I like about this film reference is that it is a literal depiction of what every story should be. No, not people eating people. People…just people. Human beings living their lives, on their own personal journeys, doing whatever they have to do to get what they want or get where they need to go.
Now, being a writer, I spend a lot of my time talking about plots and storylines. And of course, that’s the structure we hang our stories on. Honestly, though, plots are boring. It’s like talking about a fantastic summer vacation by showing you a map of the places you visited. What about the people you met, the food you tasted, the good times you had? The journey.
All the money for a writer is in that journey.
What I’m about to tell you seems to go against everything we are taught. It goes against our instincts. And it flies in the face of so many of the books we read about screenwriting.
Movies are about people, not plots or storylines.
The plot is just a device that is used to facilitate the personal journeys of your main characters. That is the most important thing I will ever tell you about screenwriting. Most of the writers I coach are obsessed with the plot and write from that bias. They spend an enormous amount of time trying to cram character work in the nooks and crannies of the plot. When they get notes from producers and script analysts, it’s always about their characters.
Compelling characters grab your attention. They make you care about the film and the story. They draw talent to your project. Most scripts sell because of producer relationships with top talent. Bankable stars are looking for great roles. Great roles are about great personal journeys, not great plots.
It is easy to fix a plot, it is harder to fix a weak character.
I’m not saying to ignore your plot, I’m just telling you that great characters are more important to a script than a great plot.
I’ll give you and example. Die Hard. A great action film starring Bruce Willis. Clearly a plot driven film, right? Well, maybe…but think about the story for a second. On the surface it’s about an off duty cop who saves a bunch of people from terrorists who take over a building on Christmas Eve.
What is it really about? Bruce Willis shows up uninvited at his wife’s company Christmas Party to take one last shot at saving their broken marriage. That’s why he’s there. That’s his personal journey. He has screwed up his relationship and wants to win her back. He loves her and believes she still loves him. When he gets there, everything goes haywire. He has to defeat the terrorists, save the building and the lives of the people inside to save his wife and have a shot at saving his marriage.
The plot is a metaphor for his personal journey and creates obstacles to Willis getting what he wants. The plot is utilized to help solve the personal journey of the characters. I won’t speak to the sequels because they fail in this and all regards.
Every film you really love is about people, not plots. Whether it’s action, horror, romance, science fiction or a western. Spend your time on who populates the worlds you create. Who are they? What do they want? Why is it a matter of life and death? The plot is about how they get there.
If you want to write great scripts, write great characters on great personal journeys.
From Scene Magazine:
WRITING IS THE KEY TO AN INDIGENOUS FILM INDUSTRY
As everybody knows, the film business in Louisiana is booming. Tax credits have lured some huge projects like THE GREEN LANTERN, THE EXPENDABLES and the next installment of the Twilight series, to name a few. In fact, I heard recently that applications for new film tax credits hit the one hundred mark in August. Incredible. My friends are working all over the state, as actors, grips, coordinators, locations, craft services, casting, etc. Where are the writers?
For the most part, they’re in Hollywood. And that’s why this boom is driven by big projects from out of state. The only way to create a home grown film industry is to write our own stories. Let’s be realistic, we are one hurricane or one zealous law changing state senator or one aggressive state with better tax credits from this thing drying up.
Don’t get me wrong, things are happening on the local level. Several local companies have been making low budget movies and there are young filmmakers out there trying to make their films. I can’t tell you how impressed I am with anybody who gets a film made in this economic climate.
A couple of weeks ago, I was one of the judges of the New Orleans 48 Hour Film Festival. I left feeling inspired. It’s a tough endeavor, writing, producing and editing a film in that amount of time. If you were one of the filmmakers, you have my respect. Some of the films were really terrific and reminded me of why I wanted to be a filmmaker in the first place.
With all the momentum and activity in our state, where is the next SEX, LIES AND VIDEOTAPE? Where is that film that defines our local film industry? We should be the next Austin, but we’re not. Not yet, anyway. I believe it’s all in the writing.
It’s time to up our game in that department. I teach, coach and fix scripts. I read dozens and dozens of them every month. We have the ideas, but we need more craft. I firmly believe to become an industry that can survive a hurricane, we have to write better screenplays. A great script doesn’t guarantee you a great film, but a bad script definitely guarantees a bad one.
This is not a knock on my screenwriting brethren, it’s a challenge.
Read more scripts, get more training, do your homework, find out what makes a great screenplay. We can build a sustainable hurricane proof, tax credit proof indigenous film industry. I promise you, I’m going to get better at this and I’m going to write one of the next great films to come out of Louisiana. Are you?